This is the first scene of my revised pre-vis.
Compared to the original, the character interaction is considerably less comedic, opting to play it straight throughout.
The cinematography has been carefully considered, in an attempt to adhere to traditional film making conventions. This not only gives the animation a natural feel, but also reflects the cinematic techniques used at the time the animation is set. Some of the more extreme shots feel a little out place as a result of this, although this may work in favour of the intended tone.
There is currently no use of accompanying music, although I'm not sure whether this scene requires it.