This is an alternative version of my Patchwork Pals idea. Its frighteningly different in comparison to the first draft, with the bulk of the story being radically different. This is an amalgamation of my own thoughts and suggestions from others, and whilst its still going to need a fair amount of revision, I feel it is a more complete and rounded story than my previous effort.
One major issue with the screenplay is it is fairly long, considering we have a one minute limit. But after discussions with Freddie and Jamie, we decided its easier to whittle down a longer, more convoluted story to a shorter, more effective one than the other way around.
Its also makes the backstory I drafted up for the Frankie character fairly redundant, as the backstory was developed to conform to the previous story. Although the motivation for the character's actions differ in either story, it is much the same character.
Patchwork Pals- Version Two
Steve - it's too complex for sure. I want you to step away from scripting, with all the detail etc. - and just go for the logline approach - just try and get to the bare bones of it. I think the whole idea that the first cat is exploded is too much; if he was taking delivery of (another) dead animal so he could complete his creation, that would make your story leaner already. Frankie's goal is to complete his patchwork monster - the obstacles are...?
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