tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7210299699467384784.post8164760995364944441..comments2023-07-01T08:50:52.116-07:00Comments on Steven Payne: Minor Project: 'Incompatibility' Screenplay Version FiveSteven Paynehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08946722461895676727noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7210299699467384784.post-85637682661166334892013-10-16T12:03:16.698-07:002013-10-16T12:03:16.698-07:00Hi Steve,
'Tidy-Heidi' made me laugh '...Hi Steve,<br /><br />'Tidy-Heidi' made me laugh 'out loud' :) Time to give your male-robot a name too using this same formula - 'Handy-Andy'? In terms of the wooing-via-cassette-modes sequence, I think that still needs work because the gardener one doesn't quite make sense in terms of an obvious choice. Also - there's lots of action implied there - and you do have to make all of it happen. Can I suggest that you power through into the animatic stage because I'm keen for you to translate some of the implied complexity of your scenes into 'easy viewing'. I don't think the Tidy-Heidi advertisement needs to as extended as all of that, because the 'Handy-Andy' ad has already taught us the concept, so I suggest you look at a way of making that punchier. Anyway - the key thing now is 'easy watching' - so do what you have to do get us 'looking' at your story now asap. Onwards, Steve :)tutorphilhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11842833126210822641noreply@blogger.com